Here's a sample response for a student who needs to improve transitions:
You have some great ideas in this essay, but it isn't quite clear to me how the ideas fit together. Stregnthening the transitions between paragraph would help the reader follow your logic more easily.
For help improving your transitions, please see: http://webster.commnet.edu/grammar/transitions.htm
For a list of words you can use for different types of transitions, see>br>
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/style/transitioncues.html